Heather, In giving the draft report a final read I have the following observations / suggestions. For the most part they are linkages between areas of the report and the addition of a couple more examples of efforts in this space. I used the line numbers from a printed copy of the Word document. Line91: change from, "... by the Discussion Group it identified areas that had no ..." to "... by the Discussion Group it identified areas that it believed had no ..." Line108-115: the term "individual" is used where as the definition uses the term "subject". I would suggest changing one or the other. Line155-156: please change the text to "Federating Identity Management in the Government of Canada: A Backgrounder> which is the title of the document the link points to. Before Line 201: the Government of New Zealand has an Evidence of Identity Standard which can be viewed at http://www.dia.govt.nz/diawebsite.nsf/wpg_URL/Resource-material-Evidence-of-.... I would suggest it be added. Line 281: change "UX" to "user experience". Line 281: as this gap is related (closely I believe) to gap9 I would suggest a sentence be added to the end along the lines of "It is also important when examining the use of attributes." Line 283: I believe that Kantara Initiative P3WG work, specifically efforts around the Privacy Assessment Criteria, are related to this gap - http://kantarainitiative.org/confluence/display/p3wg/Home Line 292: Similar to line 281 I would suggest a sentence be added along the lines of "The definition of governance needs to identify the extent to which consent is required." Line 319: I believe recommendation 2 should also address gap #8 in order to ensure use of attributes is linked to consent to use. Line 374: I believe recommendation 6 should also address gap #8 in order to ensure governance of attribute use is linked to consent to use. Kenneth Dagg Senior Project Co-ordinator | Coordonnateur de projet supérieur Security and Identity Management | Sécurité et gestion des identités Chief Information Officer Branch | Direction du dirigeant principal de l'information Treasury Board of Canada Secretariat | Secrétariat du Conseil du Trésor du Canada Ottawa, Canada K1A 0R5 Kenneth.Dagg@tbs-sct.gc.ca Telephone | Téléphone 613-957-7041 / Facsimile | Télécopieur 613-954-6642 / Teletypewriter | Téléimprimeur 613-957-9090 Government of Canada | Gouvernement du Canada -----Original Message----- From: dg-am-bounces@kantarainitiative.org [mailto:dg-am-bounces@kantarainitiative.org] On Behalf Of Heather Flanagan Sent: April 17, 2012 2:27 PM To: dg-am@kantarainitiative.org Subject: [DG-AM] LAST CALL for the Attribute Management Discussion Group report Hi all - This week will be the time to make any final edits to our report before we turn it in to the Leadership Council. Please take a few moments to review the document as you are being listed as one of the contributors since you are on the roster. Last call is open until Sunday, April 22. Assuming no major changes, we will be submitting the word document to the LC on Monday, April 23. Wiki version: http://kantarainitiative.org/confluence/display/AMDG/Report+-+DRAFT Word Doc: http://kantarainitiative.org/confluence/download/attachments/58196114/AMDG-D... Heather Flanagan, AMDG secretary _______________________________________________ DG-AM mailing list DG-AM@kantarainitiative.org http://kantarainitiative.org/mailman/listinfo/dg-am