Some very minor points:
1. I realize "exclusive" is a nice buzzword but I would suggest it's
excessive. I'm okay with it in the Subject but I'd suggest leaving it out
of the body of the message.
2. I think there's a typo in this "to bring to consensus the items". Would
it be better as "to bring consensus to the items"?
3. I think there is a typo in "to define the scope of content including the
initial body of knowledge". Should it be "to define the scope of content to
be included in the initial body of knowledge"?
Great job,
Ken
On Monday, 19 September 2016, Shannon Taylor
All,
I would appreciate your review of the email we plan to send on Sept 22 to pledgees asking them to sign up to participate in the Discussion Group.
You can find the content on the ID Pro Google Drive https://docs.google.com/document/d/15LNhdlI6BIYAzxKN3HWDOSO0dsmyynG0IqmnzIpF... .
Thanks for your edits/comments by 4:00pm Eastern tomorrow.
Regards,
Shannon
-- Kenneth Dagg Independent Consultant Identification and Authentication 613-825-2091 kendaggtbs@gmail.com